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A world without you is so hollow
Its just too much for me to swallow
How could you leave me here alone?
My reaction you should have known

All I do is damage it seems
Destroying happiness and dreams
Inside emotions, they teem
Like a blocked up stream
Slowly ripping at the seam

Hope drifting out of reach
I fear the barrier will breach
But everything stays within
Seems the devils inside will win

They all look down upon me
My devastation they can't see
They tell me to let it all go
But how can I do what I don't know?

I feel like I'm falling into a pit
My sorrows pulling me down
Sucking energy from my bones
And leaving me deep to drown

They tell me to just let it go
But how can I do what I don't know?

I sit in this room alone
I'm supposed to do this on my own
But I need you to help me
To unlock it all I need a key

I see you in the distance
The ground crumbles at my feet
As I fall I see your face
And catch those words
             I am with you
                Always and forever


I finally know what is true
You never left, we are together

They tell me to let it go
And now I finally know

As a single tear falls
I finally break the walls
I know I wasn't forgotten
I finally beat the demon
My doubt no longer rules
As my tears gather in pools
I remember as we were
And now I am sure

I will never stop walking
I'll just keep pressing on
I will never give up again
For I now know the truth

No matter what happens
We will be together
Always and forever

They told me to let it go
I finally let it flow
I wrote this for a contest on the theme "let it go" in the group :iconallpoetryisgolden:

I think of this as more of a song than a poem
You may recognise some of the lines, I stole them from my other poems because they fit perfectly :meow:  I am happy with how this came out :la:

I think I should do a giant mash of all my poems, that would be fun and challenging to make them all flow together.
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SilverJADEWolf Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Wow so amazing... you really did synchronize with the song seamlessly.  This poem is a winner!Edward Elric (I got this) [V1]   It truly is amazing, I love this poem! Racing Girl Emoji (Ehehe) [V4] 
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Sapphira-Adi Featured By Owner May 31, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
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SilverJADEWolf Featured By Owner May 31, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Racing Girl Emoji (Please forgive me) [V3] Nooooo don't die...
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Sapphira-Adi Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
STILL ALIVE AND AWESOME Fool Emoji-47 (Star) [V5] 
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SilverJADEWolf Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Suuuuurrreeeee....
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful poem you came up with!
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Sapphira-Adi Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :la:
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome :)
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014
It's an interesting theme. And it came out great :)
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Sapphira-Adi Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :la:
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No problem :)
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Kage-Yami Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's cool! It flows so well - I didn't even notice the rhyme until half-way through (good, 'cause rhyme's overrated ;P), nor that it had bits derived from your other poems.

Yes, that would be interesting... :)
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Sapphira-Adi Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :la:
You didn't notice the rhyme at first? I didn't think it was that subtle 
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Kage-Yami Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well, it was! ;P
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katamaris4ever Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014
I like this, I especially love the subtle rhymes. I like rhyming poetry, but only when it's not obvious, this is great :D
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Sapphira-Adi Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much, I'm glad you like it :D
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AnnaBellLee17 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Student Writer
Every now and then,  we need somebody to lean on during difficult times.

Two Thumbs Up  and a million more..
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Sapphira-Adi Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I am very glad you like it though :D
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AnnaBellLee17 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Student Writer
:D

i didn't mean to hit enter on the last comment.

What about breaking the chains and snagging the key that unlocks the path of success?
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Sapphira-Adi Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
that is not how I see it but it is possible to be seen that way. Not really a path of success here but breaking the chains and getting the key I can see. Break the chains of doubt and despair, the truth of what happened is the key. She found that he did not leave her, he is still there with her even though he died. So now she can let go of all the emotions of betrayal, despair, and hopelessness that came from his sudden death.
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AnnaBellLee17 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Student Writer
yep i know...

I meant getting to where she wants be at.  
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Sapphira-Adi Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is about someone's beloved dying and coming to terms with it. This person didn't have anyone to lean on and it had nothing to do with that. Nearly every poem of mine you find it means you need someone to lean on during difficult times, that could be one interpretation of them but try to look for others too. See how many meanings you can get out of them, practise for English :meow:
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AnnaBellLee17 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Student Writer
i didn't see that in it.

hmmm.....  what about finding the reason to keep going.
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Sapphira-Adi Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, to let go of the past and keep going forward
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